想知道全美Top 6的Johns Hopkins University（约翰霍普金斯大学）喜欢什么样的学生文书？学校官方栏目「Essays That Worked」最新收录了2025Fall录取学生的优秀申请文书，每一篇都经过招生官的严格筛选。这些经官方认证的范文不仅是文书创作的绝佳参考，更珍贵的是附有招生官的详细点评与申请者的写作心得。这些成功案例将为你的申请之路提供最具权威性的借鉴。
Dancing Together
作者：Dayann
I cannot dance.
This is not something I often admit willingly; in fact, it is quite baffling to me how horribly incapable I am at performing even the most basic movements on command. My grandmother often describes it as “a tragedy” as she is forced to watch her grandchild absolutely butcher our country’s cultural dances, beautiful expressions of our unique West African roots turned into poor facsimiles by my robotic movements.
And yet, year after year, I find myself taking the dance floor at my family’s events, seemingly unaware of my objective lack of skill. Eventually, my display proves to be so amazingly unbearable that I am removed from the floor and shown the correct movements over and over again until I am able to replicate them well enough to come back. Bizarrely, despite my previous declaration that I cannot dance, for the past three years, I have found myself performing an entire choreographed routine at my school’s yearly pep rallies.
It is through looking back at these events that I realize that I have created a mischaracterization of my dancing abilities through my decisive first sentence. I can dance and am, in fact, very capable of doing so, but not when I act insularly. My ability to dance correlates directly with how willing I am to collaborate, the input and support of others turning the uncoordinated and unwieldy into the near-graceful.
My attempts at dancing have led me to value community and collaboration greatly, and I find myself seeking and being drawn towards environments that will allow me to continue to develop both of these values as I learn and grow. Through my internship with the Johns Hopkins Applied Physics Lab, I was exposed to and became fascinated by the collaborative spirit that lies at the heart of Johns Hopkins. The idea that one cannot discover or innovate when working alone was affirmed during my research, and I have come to see that mutual collaboration and community are integral aspects of Johns Hopkins’ unique culture. From the research initiatives that breach the boundaries between class levels, to the many organizations such as the Tutorial Project, relying on the shared initiatives of different students to directly make an impact on Baltimore and its many communities, and the distinctive access to especially interdisciplinary topics such as neuromorphic systems, I view that Johns Hopkins exemplifies the peak of collaborative achievement in education.
JHU招生官点评
从Dayann的文书中，我们了解到他的几个特质。首先，他热衷参与，尽管他坚称自己不会跳舞，却在字里行间展现出翩跹舞姿。其次，他意识到自身潜能需通过团队合作才能被激发，唯有与他人“共舞”，方能实现个人与集体的双赢。最后，他将这段经历与未来规划相连接：他明白要实现个人最大成长，必须融入能促进团队协作、在相互激励中共同进步的环境。
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Dayann的创作建议
选择同时聚焦我的文化背景和曾经的不自信，让我有机会展现这种文化根基如何塑造我的价值观，以及在学术研究领域中对自我的期待。这篇文书最大的挑战，在于如何搭建一座桥梁——将自我反思的领悟与对大学教育的具体期望相连接。本质上，这是一个将"为何选择JHU"的深层原因清晰识别并转化为文字的过程。
Left and Right Don’t Exist
作者：Stella
The first lesson I learned as a student pilot is that left and right don’t exist. Maybe driving on a highway or in a parking lot, left and right is precise enough to describe the location and movements of slow-moving bikers, pedestrians, and cars. But at 36,000 feet in the air in a steel tube hurdling almost 200 miles an hour? Left and right just don’t cut it.
During one of my first flights in a small Cessna-182, my flight instructor ordered me to scan the horizon for approaching aircrafts. To my right, I caught a glimpse of one: another Cessna with maroon stripes, the sun’s reflection glinting off its windows. Gesturing vaguely to my two o’clock, I informed my flying instructor, “There’s a plane to the right.”
“No, to your right. From his position, what direction does he see you?” From his angle, I was to his left. In that moment, I realized that perspective and precision of language is everything. The radio chirped: “Cessna One-Eight-Two Sandra, heading north to John Wayne Airport. Over.”
I navigate using my compass’s north, east, south, and west directions because every pilot’s vantage point differs from each other both vertically and horizontally, creating opposite perspectives. My right was that pilot’s left.
Through flying, I began to consider all points of view, regardless of my personal perspective.
Perhaps it was my ability to scan the horizon to communicate a single story, uniting contrasting outlooks, that drew me to my love for journalism and the diverse melting pot that was my community.
To me, journalism modernizes the ancient power of storytelling, filled with imperfect characters and intricate conflicts to which I am the narrator. As editor-in-chief for my school newspaper, The Wildcat’s Tale, I aim to share the uncensored perspective of all students and encourage my editorial groups to talk — and listen — to those with whom they disagree. Starting each newspaper edition with a socratic, round-table discussion, I ask the other journalists to pursue stories that answer the questions: why did this happen and where will it lead?
Expanding beyond the perspectives of my classmates, I began writing articles for the Korea Daily, and later, the Los Angeles Times High School Insider. I schedule interviews with city council candidates, young and old voters, and mayors of my town, obtaining quotes and anecdotes to weave into my writing. My interviews with both Democratic and Republican voters have taught me to thoroughly report polarizing-opposite opinions through an unbiased lens. As a journalist, I realized I cannot presume the opinions of the reader, but instead simply provide them with the tools necessary to formulate their own conclusions.
However, differences in perspective in my articles are not solely limited to politics. I found that in my suburban community, people love to read about the small-town hospitality of their own friends and neighbors. Quirky traditions, like our Fourth of July carnival clown and local elementary school’s Thanksgiving talent show, are equally as important to me as national headlines are. My favorite stories to publish are the ones taped onto fridges, proudly framed on the mom-and-pop downtown diner, or pinned into the corkboard in my teacher’s classroom. I discovered the size of my story does not matter, but the impact I leave on the reader does.
In my time as both a student pilot and journalist, I grew to love these stories, the ones that showed me that living life with blinders, can not only be boring, but dangerous. Whether I was 36,000 feet in the air or on ground level, by flying and writing, I realized that the most interesting stories of life come straight from the people most different from me.
JHU招生官点评
Stella以学习飞行的经历作为文书开篇，但其主旨并非飞行本身，而是这段经历赋予她观察世界的多维视角。她巧妙地将这种感悟与另一项热爱——新闻事业相联结。通过深入阐述自己在新闻领域的工作方法与社会影响，她清晰展现了飞行感悟如何持续滋养着她的专业实践：从在编辑部倾听多元观点，到以均衡缜密的视角剖析事件，我们得以窥见她不仅以这种态度追求热爱，更将其融入社群服务。
文章在展现新兴趣与社会影响力之外，更核心的价值在于揭示她如何将一种经历的感悟迁移至生命其他维度。这让我们确信，Stella将成为校园社群中这样的存在：始终乐于倾听、学习、转化认知，并持续为社群创造价值。
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Stella的创作建议
我选择描写自己最热爱的两件事——飞行与写作，因为只有谈论真正热爱的事物时，我才能写出最真诚的文字。这篇文书记录了我对日常事务的思考过程和创造性应对方式，这些都是简历无法呈现的维度。我没有刻意迎合招生团队的偏好，而是专注于用文字勾勒真实的自我。用自然交谈的语调同时保持专业表述，虽具挑战，却让我获益良多。
Queen’s Gambit
作者：Dante
No, Dante. Stop, think, and look at the entire board.
I was thoroughly confused. I thought I had procured the complete solution to this elaborate chess puzzle. What am I missing? A knight fork, a bishop move? Am I in check? After a quick glance at the left side of the board, I slapped my hand on my head as I suddenly realized what my chess coach was telling me. My queen was sitting unused, positioned all the way on the other side of the board, and I had no idea. If I were to sacrifice my queen, the opposing rook would be forced to capture it, allowing me to finish the game in style with the illustrious “smothered mate.”
If you begin to look at the whole chessboard, then these puzzles will become a breeze for you.
Ever since that chess lesson, those words have stuck. Indeed, my chess skills improved swiftly as my rating flew over the 1000 Elo threshold in a matter of months. However, those words did not merely pertain to chess. Looking at the whole picture became a foundational skill that I have utilized throughout my life in school and other endeavors. I particularly remember making use of it on the soccer field.
Now, I’m no Arnold Schwarzenegger. Weighing in at a monstrous 125 pounds and standing 5 foot 8 inches, my opponents made it a habit to tackle me to the ground. Once again, I found myself face to face with the defender, and before I knew it, I crumbled to the ground, left isolated and dispossessed. Laying dazed on the pitch, my mind flashed back to the chessboard. It occurred to me that soccer, much like chess, relies on the proper position of the many pieces that combine to create a finished strategy. The “whole picture” of soccer is not just how fast or strong one is or how many tackles you put in; that is only one element of the puzzle. The intelligence and creativity needed in a playmaker is also an essential part of a well-rounded soccer team. I realized that my most significant advantage would always be my in-depth understanding of the game of soccer—where to pass the ball, when to make a run, if the ball should be in the air or driven. I picked myself off the ground, and when that same defender came barreling towards me again, I was zoned in, oblivious to the noise around me. I chipped the ball into the open space right behind him, knowing my teammate would run into the space without even looking. From then on, I continued to hone my skills through intense practice to become the best playmaker I could be, working in conjunction with my faster and stronger teammates to become a well-balanced, unified team.
Through chess and soccer, I have discovered that every piece in a puzzle has a purpose. This new perspective has enhanced my ability to stop, stand back, and analyze the whole picture in the many dimensions of my life. In my scientific studies, it was not enough to examine just one C. reinhardtii cell, but it was necessary to zoom out the microscope to capture all of the thousand cells to truly understand quorum sensing and its consequences. In my studies of music, it was not enough to listen to the melody of the finale of Beethoven’s 9th symphony, but one must realize that the true beauty of the composition lies in the whole orchestra handing off this simple melody to every instrument. All these facets—music, research, soccer, chess—are not only completed puzzles but also parts of a greater whole: my life. Every aspect of myself matters as much as the other. As high school comes to an end, the pieces on my board are set, and I only have success in mind.
Your move.
JHU招生官点评
Dante的文书没有平铺直叙，而是通过生动场景传递了他的好奇心和多元兴趣。他将国际象棋领悟的策略思维与足球场上的实战表现巧妙联结，着重分享心得感悟而非简单罗列赛事经历。我们清晰看到Dante具备跨学科应用知识的能力——这种特质正是在JHU取得学术成就的关键。通过这篇文书，我们确信他的思维方式将助力其在学校的跨学科课程体系中脱颖而出。
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Dante的创作建议
在大学申请过程中，“全面展示”始终是被强调的重点。我对此建议采取了略显字面的理解——通过文书将申请材料中的所有碎片串联成整体，让每项活动都超越简单的简历条目，展现出更深层的意义。我希望让招生官明白：我的所有经历都不是为了填充简历，而是每件事都有其独特意义，每项投入都凝聚着全心投入的努力，这一切都是为了成就更好的自己。
Red Over Black
作者：Elizabeth
“Bring the ace of spades up,” my Grandmother said as we started our first game of solitaire after I got home from school. “Now, put the black eight onto the red nine.” We played solitaire often, working together to reorganize the cards most efficiently. While it was meant to be a single-player game, solitaire was the one thing we did together, moving and dealing the cards in a symphony of order: red to black, red to black. Pulling the pattern out of the random array of cards.
For hours, we sat at our glossy kitchen table, playing game after game. If there were no more moves to make, I would always sneak a card from below a column without my grandma seeing. She always did. I couldn’t understand- What was the big deal of revealing the cards? We might win one out of ten games played. But if we just ‘helped ourselves,’ as I liked to call it, we could win them all. I didn’t understand her adherence to the “Turn Three” rule. Why not just turn the cards one by one? It was too frustrating to see the cards go by, but turn exactly three and not be able to pick them up! After one game we lost, I asked my grandma, “Why do we play this way? There’s a much better way to play.” In response, she quickly explained her adamancy to the rules, what before had made no sense to me.
Her polished fingernails scratched against the cards as she shuffled them and told me. “Solitaire isn’t just a game for one person.” Her deep brown eyes sharply glanced at me, “No.” It wasn’t just a game for one person, but rather for two sides of a person. It was an internal battle, a strengthening of the mind. One playing against oneself. “If one side of you cheats, how would either side get better?”
Red lipsticked lips slightly grinned as my grandma saw me trying to understand, but I didn’t agree with this thought at once. The cards rhythmically slapped down onto the table as my grandmother, small yet stoic, effortlessly moved the cards with frail hands. I watched her. I thought about any other way to understand this idea. I desperately wanted to. Trying to think, I couldn’t imagine another instance where this sense of tranquility, bringing the melody of organization out of a cacophony of random cards, came from such intense competition.
The slow manipulation of life around her precedent made me think back to my grandma, to what she told me, and made me understand. Two years later, pushing myself harder than I ever had before in a field hockey match, I realized how much I had been cheating myself and my team by not putting this effort in before. Four years later, I was helping my parents clean after dinner when I saw the value in not taking the easy way out. Five years later, I found once again the difficult ease in pottery. Lifting the pot off the wheel, I found satisfaction. Looking back, I hadn’t realized that this notion of self-accountability appears in almost every aspect of my life.
Seven columns. Four aces. Fifty-two cards. Laying these down, I’m brought back to playing solitaire with my grandmother. Through time, her inner spirit never crumbled as her body began to deteriorate. Her mind stayed strong and proud. I admired her for that more than she could’ve imagined. Each challenge I face, or will face, in life, I think back to her lesson one inconspicuous afternoon. Never let myself cheat. Always hold myself accountable. Work hard in every competition, especially the ones against myself, as those are the ones that better me the most. I did not understand what my grandmother meant that day. Now, with each day, I do more.
JHU招生官点评
许多学生希望在大学申请文书中讲述生命中某个重要之人或家庭成员。这类文章的关键在于：必须确保核心始终是申请者本人，而非仅仅聚焦他人。Elizabeth的文章出色地做到了这一点——她既生动刻画了外婆的形象，又始终将叙事焦点落在自己身上：从那个特定时刻的领悟，到这种经历对她人生的持续影响。
更值得一提的是，虽然Elizabeth从童年经历切入，却巧妙地将主题延伸至日常生活，展现了她如何将自律与勤奋融入生命。通过理解Elizabeth的为人与价值观，我们可以预见她在校园社区中将扮演的角色。她所展现的勤奋与自省品质，早已超越纸牌游戏的范畴，更贯穿于运动、爱好、家庭生活之中，也必将在大学校园的新集体中持续发热。
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Elizabeth的创作建议
我希望能通过这篇文书，向招生官展现我的个性与核心价值观。文书中所强调的自律、勤奋和自我提升等品质，往往难以通过申请材料的其他部分体现。我期待招生官能透过文字，既看到我认知世界的方式，也理解这种视角的形成根源。
Stepping Out of My Comfort Zone
作者：Samuel
If you told me I would be playing a sport called squash at 11 years old, I would call you crazy. But in seventh grade, I was at a new school 10 times bigger than my last one. I felt like a little fish in a big pond. I was quiet, withdrawn, and very introverted. A lot of the time, I stayed where I was comfortable.
During the first week of school, a group of people visited the school and they introduced themselves as Squashbusters. At that time, I’d only heard of Squash once before, but I didn’t really know what it was. Because the program combined the sport of squash with academic support, mentoring, and service opportunities, I decided to sign up. It’s been six years and this program has made a monumental difference in my life.
Being a part of SquashBusters is a program that really pushed me out of my shell to the point where I’ve grown accustomed to challenging myself. In SquashBusters, they tell us to push ourselves past our limits on the squash courts, but that mindset has transferred to other areas of my life as well. From team trips and tournaments to cringy karaoke moments and participating in eccentric traditions like our annual SquashBusters Olympics, my comfort zone has steadily grown larger. My peers brought out a side of me I didn’t even know existed. I haven’t transformed completely from introvert to extrovert, but I’ve become more social as the years go by.
At Hopkins, I want to do something similar. I want to try new things and embrace the campus traditions. Even though I will develop intellectually from the many academic classes and clubs/activities offered on campus, I feel as though a true community is birthed from exploring beyond what one’s used to. From traditions like Blue Jay Opening Day and the Spring Fair to the many world-changing clubs like the Amnesty International club and the Foreign Affairs Symposium, the different ways to be involved in the Hopkins community is limitless and invigorating and I can’t wait to be a part of the Hopkins family.
JHU招生官点评
Samuel的文书展现了突破舒适圈的自省力——这不仅是重要的人生课题，更与JHU学生日常践行的精神高度契合。在JHU，学生们不断拓展探索的边界，直面课堂内外的挑战，执着追寻新发现的热爱。通过持续挑战自我，Samuel将壁球场上的领悟融入生活的各个领域，生动诠释了这些特质。若获得机会，他必将在JHU丰富的学术与课外活动中茁壮成长，并展现出克服一切挑战的能力——这正是他在文书中向我们传递的决心。
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Samuel的创作建议
记住初稿往往不尽如人意，所以尽管放手去写，即使逻辑混乱也无妨。同时务必预留充足时间进行修改——无论是同辈互改、老师指导，还是自我修订都至关重要。
Lifelong Learning
作者：Rozanne
The white yarn slipped off my aluminium crochet hook, adding a single crochet to rows and rows of existing stitches, that looked to be in the form of a blob. Staring at the image of the little unicorn amigurumi lit up on the screen of my laptop, and looking back at the UMO (unidentified messy object) number five, I was extremely perplexed.
This had seemed so easy. Round 1, construct a magic circle with 6 single crochets. Done. Round 2 was an increase round resulting in a total of 12 stitches. Also done. The remaining rounds were blurred into hours and minutes that should have resulted in a little white creature in the likeness of a unicorn, but sitting on my desk (much like the four days before today) was a pool of tangled white yarn. It was not until day seven that a creature with a lopsided head whose horn was the only identifier of the mythical being emerged.
Very much like learning how to crochet, my journey in forging my own path and finding a passion was confusing, messy and at times infuriating. Even in primary school, I had heard all the stories of individuals finding their own route in life. I had been told stories of those who found their passion at a young age and were exceptionally proficient at their craft, of those that abandoned their interests and pursued a lucrative career, even those who chose their dreams but regretted it afterwards. This weighed heavily on me, as I was determined to have a success story as many of my other family members had. The only problem was that I did not have a direction.
In the years following primary school, I stepped out of my comfort zone in a frenzy to find a passion. I joined the school orchestra where I played the violin, and a debate class to practice public speaking and become much more eloquent. At my ballet school, I branched out to contemporary and jazz dance. I stuffed myself with experience similar to an amigurumi engorged with batting. I found myself enjoying all of those activities but soon enough, I was swamped with extracurriculars. Just like the tangles of white yarn on my desk, I was pulled in all directions. I still felt lost. To make things worse, it seemed as if everyone else had found their path in life, and they had all become white unicorns while I was still doubting the stitch I just made.
It was not until high school that I realised that I could view this mission to find a passion from another perspective. While successfully completing a crochet project is an accomplishment itself, the motions of making slip knots, single or double crochets takes you on an adventure as well. The knots that I had encountered in my craft were evidence of my experiences and what shaped me as an individual. My exploration of various paths through detours may have sometimes resulted in roadblocks, but I continued to persevere and learn from my experiences, applying the skills that I have gained to future knots. The mini adventures that I went on were all crucial to me in the greater journey of life.
Through trial and error, the current adventure that I am on resonates the most with me, taking me down the path of service and environmental activism. However, I have learnt that no one path is static, and I can be on more than one path at a time. While I may only be halfway to the proportionate unicorn amigurumi that some others may have already achieved, I still have so much to learn and so much that I want to learn, and so my journey to grow continues.
JHU招生官点评
Rozanne的文书通过钩针编织这一新爱好，巧妙隐喻了她寻找人生热忱的探索历程。她反思道：尽管两种过程初始都显得混乱困惑，但投入必要的时间与努力终将收获更丰硕的成果。文中还提及她从舞蹈到环保行动等多领域实践，以及钩针等爱好。更令人印象深刻的是，这篇文书让我们看到她善于把握机遇、以多元方式参与社群、勇于突破舒适区并具备自省能力的特质。在我们考量她将如何为JHU社区作贡献时，可以肯定：即便尚在探索确切的热忱方向，她必将全心投入，充分利用在校时光创造价值。
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Rozanne的创作建议
在活动列表中，我着重列举了那些倾注最多热忱的社团与活动。而这篇文书让我能展现更立体的自我：无论是钩针、折纸、阅读等爱好，更揭示了那些塑造我成长轨迹的重要人生片段。它像一束聚光灯，清晰照亮我参与各类社团的初心与思考路径，将选择背后的逻辑脉络完整呈现。
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